One cut to remember. One cut to forget.
One cut to hinder. One cut to abet.
I tidy my fringe. The last stayed unread
in my datebook… my pentangled forehead.
by TETIANA ALEKSINA
© All rights reserved 2015
One cut to remember. One cut to forget.
One cut to hinder. One cut to abet.
I tidy my fringe. The last stayed unread
in my datebook… my pentangled forehead.
by TETIANA ALEKSINA
© All rights reserved 2015
unbolt me 
How could one not like something so tongue-in-cheek Tolkienish!
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Ah hah! Yes, now that you say it, I see it! 😀
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If you claim that you haven’t seen it before, I won’t believe you!
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This made me smile, it reminds me of Tolkien in The Hobbit, when Gollem taunts Bilbo in the caves. Very good.
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Thank you, Henry!
Well, you’re the second person who mentioned it. I’ve read Tolkien and I’ve watched some movies which were based on it, but I don’t remember this scene.
Now I’m curious! I should check it!! 😛
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The full version is in the book my friend
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Thank you! I’ll find this episode! 🙂
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…and one last cut to end it all?
No way, that’s too close to being Tolkienish.
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LOL! Well… not cut!
I love uncut versions of such epic stories 😉
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This one leaves me feeling two different emotions. On the one hand I feel a touch of seriousness, and on the other hand I feel a touch of playfulness. Your poem conveys both of these so well! (Also, it reminds me of a time when I was a child and I tried to cut my own hair. When I realised what a bad job of it I’d done, I hid the cut off hair behind a chest of drawers. My fringe was so uneven that my mother knew straight away what I had done!) 😛
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LOL!
‘Small children’ means ‘small problems’… all is a bit complicated with big children, yes? 😉
I love your mixed reaction and feelings, Tony… the best reaction, actually. Thank you 🙂
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unbolt I’m not sure if this is too much to ask but would you mind texting me ꒰´•௰•` ꒱ ( with any social media of any sort ) bc I desperately need help with poem writing for my school. it is regarding things in my community between 50-80 words and I would appreciate if you can lend me a hand.thanks a whole lot
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No problem, Stasia!
I would be glad to help (BTW, aren’t you afraid of excluding from your school because of my skewed poetry?) 😉
You can write me an e-mail (the contact form is on the main page) or a message on FB… Feel free 😉
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our developing nation is as
hopeful as the break of day
with opportunities knocking at our door
don’t let it fade away
as diverse as it is cohesive
united we stand
gradual progressiveness
we promise no end
distinct races
different faces
sharing common spaces
the scarlet string interlaces
the harmonious blend
of various cultures
all tangled into one
we are proud to be Singaporean
( I’m sorry hAHAh im so lazy to email thanks unbolt )
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Wow! A lovely poem, Stasia!!
What disturbs you here? How can I help you?
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The entire poem disturbs me tbh hAHAh it’s for this literature thing and I think I did a terrible job so help me out with the ediying
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My dear Stasia!
Firstly, I DO LOVE your poem.
I guess that it’s a great job!
The patriotic feelings were expressed nicely and simply. I wouldn’t change words and sense… You should be more confident! I’m sure that your teacher will be proud with such a work of his/her pupil!
If we say about grammatical things… LOL!
I’m not a big expert, do you know 😛
Hmmm… I guess we can ask an advice of my friends 🙂
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can you please ask anyone else you know for help if possible unbolt and it would be gr8 to get back to me before Monday comes hAHAh. I’m really lost bc I think some parts don’t look that good especially how the poem doesn’t flow wel
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Well… the first is here.
‘It sounds great but I would change “break” to “dawn” of a new day. Everything else looks great to me…”
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alright thanks
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ily thanks unbolt. appreciate the help
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sorry to bother but is there any way to change the last para by adding a metaphor.
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What about
‘the heart of Singapore
beats in each of us’?
I’m going to show your poem to another friend.
If he’ll answer, I’ll write you through a couple of hours.
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thank you so much unbolt I really appreciate this
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Stasia, my girl, your poem is great!
You shouldn’t doubt! You did a big work!
You can be proud with your homework!
It’s the opinion of my another friend. Do you have doubts still?
‘WOW! Actually, I wouldn’t change a single word. That’s my opinion. I think this is awesome! The flow is perfect, and the ideas of racial harmony come across loud and clear. Fantastic work! I truly love this!’
You don’t need any help here. You did it perfectly.
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aw unbolt. words like those above really touch me. thanks a lot. I do tend to have a habit of doubting myself hAHAh thanks anyways 1!!1! I really really really appreciate this
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You’re welcome, Stasia ❤
Be confident! Believe in yourself!
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btw thanks unbolt. try with whatever you can
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You’re welcome, Stasia!
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i love how you see
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Thank you, John!
Holdfény alatt járom az erdőt.
Vacog a fogam s fütyörészek.
Hátam mögött jön tíz-öles,
Jó Csönd-herceg
És jaj nekem, ha visszanézek.
Oh, jaj nekem, ha elnémúlnék,
Vagy fölbámúlnék, föl a Holdra:
Egy jajgatás, egy roppanás.
Jó Csönd-herceg
Nagyot lépne és eltiporna.
(Jó Csönd-herceg előtt by Ady Endre)
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I love it my ❤
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Thank you, Walt ❤
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❤
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You’re funny.
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Thank you, Sue!
I don’t need another comment… this one is the best one for me 😛
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My Dearest Hatter, how do you manage to do this? I know you use the tweezers, but OMG, this took my breath away, stunning! I have read it many times now, and with each pass, it challenges my mind, sending it in another direction. This is most thought provoking, it has sense of attachment and detachment at the same time, at least for me. Wow, fantastic!
Alice ♥
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Alice… damn! 😀
Your comment makes me thrill… I can’t hold the tweezers and the lancet… Hell! I let fall them!
LOL!
The unexpected cut on the unexpected place… Another illegible line 😛
(Thank you, thank you! My breathless Alice who runs in all directions at once is my best daydream!)
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Oh, thank god not a nightmare! LOL! ❤
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The nightmare it’s the same picture, but with Red Queen in place of Alice!
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