her eyes had become shallow
men were drowning in them before
now they merely slosh through
and don’t even take off their shoes
by TETIANA ALEKSINA
© All rights reserved 2021
her eyes had become shallow
men were drowning in them before
now they merely slosh through
and don’t even take off their shoes
by TETIANA ALEKSINA
© All rights reserved 2021
This is brilliant!!!
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Aw, thank you so much. Tati will really appreciate your kind words. So glad you enjoyed reading this! 🙂
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This is really good!
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Tati will be so pleased with that! Thanks so much for reading, Conor!
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😥 hulk sad after reading this.
But hulk also warns that girl not to slip anything into guys’ drinks. Effect wears off quickly.
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Note duly taken!
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Ah, I’m feeling feel the love guys! I’ve been warmed, moved and uplifted by the haughty heroine.
Peer deep into that icy glare-/ I wouldn’t wanna go there- /Cold heartless eyes hardly blink,/ Reflecting a heart like an ice rink.
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Fine accompaniment there, Obb! Thank you! 😉
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A beautiful four line piece that packs a smile and deeper meaning into the same case!
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Absolutely, Jaya! Thanks so much for reading Tati’s fine words! 🙂
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so much said and so neatly… like a backpack! kinda, sorta. I double like this.
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Like a backpack! That is probably the coolest assessment of a poem I’ve ever read! Thanks for reading! 🙂
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Nicely penned. Love the imagery of immersion. ❤
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So glad you enjoyed it, Suzette. Thank you so much for reading!
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Pleasure! You two are super talented. Keep on!
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Those eyes so enchanting like a deep dark lake are now but a dirty puddle. What did she do wrong?
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Or, rather, what wrong was done to her?
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Beautiful. So much conveyed in so little words
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I love Tati’s minimalist style. It works so well.
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