I look at the sky.
A vulture hovers over
the horizon chest
like a tin pectoral cross,
barely hanging by a thread.
Smell of carrion.
I lie on the ground and see
the vulture falls down
into the cloudy collar.
The sky lost the faith. Like me.
by TETIANA ALEKSINA
© All rights reserved 2015
unbolt me 
This one hits close to home. As someone who used to be religious, the feelings of alienation and having to start from scratch under a new paradigm are strong in this poem. If I didn’t know better, I’d swear that you have been through this experience too. I love this, Tati. Very much. ❤
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Would it be weird if I liked and responded to my own comment? Yeah, probably. Ha ha. (I’m so easily freakin’ amused.) 😛
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That’s really beautiful, thanks for sharing.
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Blackbird, thank you so much for reading and commenting. We appreciate this very much. 🙂
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Awesome!
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So’s your avatar, Bee! SO cool! 😀
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Thank you!
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Awesome and beautiful work! A masterpiece!! ❤️
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So cool to see you here, Walt. And I completely agree with you! More hearts are in order, methinks! 😀
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I like this a lot very well written 🙂
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Tati thanks you very much, and we hope you’ll keep coming back for more! 🙂
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🙂
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The thought of being there, exposed to be picked by carrion birds is a very strong metaphor… not a good place to be.
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You make a fair point, Björn. I think that’s what it can feel like when one leaves their faith behind. 🙂
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10/10 Well done
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Tati thanks you! 🙂
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There are many vultures where I live. I like that you chose an ugly, unwanted creature and gave them some beauty. Their deeds non other would chose. Thanks for your words!
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I love this comment so much. I think you’ve seen exactly Tati’s intention with this poem. Thank you for reading and commenting, dvaal! 🙂
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Beautiful, beautiful tanka. One of the best I have seen in awhile–
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Tati is pretty masterful when it comes to writing tankas, that’s for sure. Thanks for visiting and reading, Cyn! 🙂
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lovely poem
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Agreed, Mukul. It truly is. Thank you for visiting us! 🙂
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welcome
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