jack and jill wanted to be good little entrepreneurs
so they went up the hill to sell a pail of water
but no coin was made ’cos no one wanted to climb
that big ass hill in the summer to buy water with a metallic aftertaste
that hadn’t been chilled or bottled or had a wedge of lime affixed to
so jack and jill came grumbling back down
and died in a cardboard hovel from dehydration and harsh market realities
by TONY SINGLE
© All rights reserved 2016
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Lol they didn’t have to die if their one idea failed. Probably they were doing something else than their business 😛
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Mebbe so. 😛
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Ah, what an altogether unique and humorous take on Jack and Jill! Love it, Tony! 😀
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Thanks, Sir Jonathan. I’m so glad you liked it! 😀
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A new version of the rhyme!!
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Yup! And it was a lot of fun to write! 😉
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With the right promotion of their business idea, they both could have made a fortune. But just by relying on the value of their product, they could not compete with the cheap soft drinks sold down in the valey.
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And, as we all know, most people prefer a flashy cola to good ol’ dependable water. A shame really…
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Water is my new religion. Thanks for this refreshing draught!
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You’re welcome, sir. Drink it in, I say. Drink it in. 🙂
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Reblogged this on Still Another Writer's Blog.
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Just love how your mind works. Water seems to be a theme lately….
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Aw, thanks, Nadia. Yes, we do seem to be following a watery motif of late, don’t we? Hope we don’t get waterlogged! 😛
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Unless being waterlogged means it’s easier to write… Then we all benefit. 🙂
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Good point! (Maybe I should shower more often then…) 😛
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Very astute and wry. Worthy of MAD magazine in its heyday.
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That’s quite the compliment! I remember reading quite a lot of MAD magazine back when I was a child. Sergio Aragonés was always my favourite cartoonist of them all! 🙂
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I was a Jack Davis guy, but admired Sergio for the amount of detail in such small spaces. Most of my reading was in the 1960s; they were all amazing!
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Jack Davis was pretty cool actually, so I can understand why he would have been your favourite. Most of my reading was in the 80s, probably a bit past Mad Magazine’s golden age, I’d reckon. 🙂
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I would agree, but to be fair, it’s been said of MAD that everyone reckons the era they started reading was it’s golden age.
The early MAD writers predicted this, when in #2 they ‘published’ a letter from ‘a reader’ complaining that MAD had lost its edge.
A great institution though.
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Ha ha! Now that is brilliant! I would have expected no less. 😉
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Love it! At least they tried 🙂
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That’s certainly a good way of looking at it, IsyLLiS. 😉
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I feel good to be back, and reading your posts again 🙂
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Last I heard Jack & Jill did okay … EU bail out …surname Perrier if memory serves me well.
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Whew! Well, all’s well that ends well, eh? 😉
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