A night builds own imperium.
A shadow steals my soul.
If my life is aimless delirium
Then death is a worthy goal.
An open window. Like drops of milk
These clouds in anthracite sky.
I finished a verse. I uncurtained silk.
I stepped on the sill. Good bye…
by TETIANA ALEKSINA
© All rights reserved 2014
unbolt me 
Very sad and melancholy. Though where the ending is uncertain, hope remains. Well done!
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Yes, there’s always hope, even if it’s not in the place we were looking. Thanks so much for dropping by and reading! 🙂
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Reblogged this on Discovering Culture.
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Thank you so much! 🙂
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The softness of “drops of milk” and “uncurtained silk” and the sound of “sill” contrasts brilliantly with the harsh, hardness of the jump at the end of the poem. Brilliant! Long live such talent!
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I couldn’t agree more, Marianne. Long may Tati continue to write! 😀
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This is very good, but I fear there will be no sequel.
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Aww… thank you! Yes, you’re right. Definitely, no sequel for this one… Hmmm… Okay! I know a solution. Let’s press a rewind button instead 😛
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Excellent use of imagery and rhyme couplet to drive the poem to the last sharp line. Very well done.
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Oh, thank you, thank you again! ❤ ❤ ❤
I'm happy that you like my strange writings!
Please, take care and have a great Sunday!
Your Unbolt
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I love the phrase “I uncurtained silk”. Really nice response to the prompt. http://lilypupslife.wordpress.com/
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Thank you, Lily ❤
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Holy crap, that’s a dark ending! So sudden. So unexpected. Fantastic work! You really took me by surprise with that! 😀
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Aww… thank you, Tony!
Ha-ha! I caught you unawares!
I do love your perplexed face! 😉
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I’m always perplexed, so you’ll see it often. Ha ha! 😛
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I agree with “field of thorns”–wasn’t expecting a step off the windowsill. Had to go back and read it twice to make sure I got it. Well done.
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Thank you!
Oh, I’m really honored that you’ve read it twice.
It means that I’ve touched a string inside you… It’s the biggest happiness for any author…
Thank you ❤
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Awesomely brilliant, Tia. The start to the end is smartly enveloped. I loved the ending very much…………it was a very profound Goodbye.
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Oh… Reva… thank you!!
I know that it isn’t so encouragingly… but mysterious are the ways of the Lord. Sometimes not we write our verses… sometimes all is vice versa.
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Dearest Tia, I completely understand and agree with you @not we write our verses. Just have your inner peace and stay beautiful. 🙂
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Thank you, my dear Reva!
Your comments encourage and inspire me always! They help me to go ahead and become better 🙂
Have a beautiful week!
Your Tia.
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My Pleasure, Tia. Take some credit, for I am also encouraged and received friendly by you. Have a blissful week and stay smiling. 🙂
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I wish you the same, Reva!
Have a great week!
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You too, Tia 🙂
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“Good bye” very powerful, you get to the last line and it slaps you in the face! Brilliant! Bravo!
Always,
Alice
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Thank you, Alice!
Hmm… a slap in the face… the best way to bring somebody round 😉
Isn’t it?
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“I stepped on the sill. Good bye…”, I was not expecting that, dark yes, but the complete finality of all, wow! So, I hope that it was taken as a compliment.
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Yes. It was taken right 😉
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